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posted 8th Apr 2009, 11:53 PM

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8th Apr 2009, 11:53 PM

Indybot

This page went through a few changes from start to finish. The original page three showed Leech looking much more upset, in a newbish attempt to "up the drama" of the moment. I immediately regretted this, as it's fairly out of character for Leech to lose her composure over the death of a total stranger, and it counteracts the intended message that this sort of thing happens a lot in Whateverland.

In an attempt to fix it, I rewrote the dialogue of the offscreen bystanders, making them sound more irritated than horrified. Leech's breach of character still grated at me, until I finally caved and redrew the whole thing.

Lot of reworking for a four-panel page. And it still needs work. But I can tolerate mismatched art a lot more than sloppy writing.

-Indy Out!

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